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Re: YWS Bill of Rights
Hear, hear! (I just had to say that :D ) It is a perfectly imperfect document... Just like any other constitution ever made. Therefore, I propose a message to Nate ...
Mar 16, 2009 -
Re: Three Companions Chapter One
about the tying.. Dwarfs do tie their hair but only if it's too long to be let stay without a string, they also tie their beards when it comes to ...
Feb 7, 2009 -
Re: I Don't Know
Good work... and you are not alone, I feel the same... Unles I'm preocupied. I also feel that there is no meaning to live and so on. It happens when ...
Jan 14, 2009 -
Re: silent Hill: Requiem- chapter 3
Hi It's me, I'm a bit late. Sorry Maki-cha~~n . “I’m just pulling your leg. Its probably fog from Toluca lake.” It's not its. The moment she said that I ...
Jan 11, 2009 -
Re: First Kiss, edit
I'm sorry for the lateness of this critique. But I am here am I not? :D I have nothing against the waitress, my brain functions in such way that these ...
Jan 11, 2009 -
Re: Nolan Simmons
Wait I'll get to the review... I'll just stare at the screen for a few more seconds.... okay there. That was pure art. I think his name was Nolan, but ...
Jan 4, 2009 -
Re: Disenchanted
If oceans were not infinitely deep And horizons just a figment of my eye. If art was not born of the soul, The human race just a minute in time. ...
Jan 4, 2009 -
Re: Prologue of my story
Prologue (edited) The summer night was hauntingly still. Nothing moved, not even the leaves covering the surrounding trees. A thin, mournful howl suddenly split the air, piercing through the silence ...
Dec 26, 2008 -
Re: Exile: Chapter 1
Please note that this is my first post here and that I started writing in English four months ago. Hope its not a complete waste of time Yes but you ...
Dec 20, 2008 -
Re: Poisoned Razor Blades
Nice. Good work You two. Ahem now to work. You have poisoned the wretched blood in my veins, My wrists aren't the only thing that is stained. The blood won't ...
Dec 14, 2008 -
Re: The Tortured Child (Punk Rock)
OK It is me as promised... (Crazy guitar solo) First person (High and calm voice): In life we grew up with smiles… We did not know much about the evil ...
Dec 14, 2008 -
Re: Beyond the hills-Chapter 4
Okay. How did Ro get to the place he went to? Explain. There aren't many mistakes here that I could see. The only ones are the comma and period mistakes. ...
Nov 29, 2008 -
Re: The Broken -- Traitor Colonel -- Chapter One
Gold star work. I can't really comment upon many things, because of the amount of comments here already, but I forced myself to find something. (anything) that I could correct. ...
Nov 22, 2008 -
Re: Poem of the Prisoner
Robert... Don't argue with the critics!!!! :D But anywayz... GREAT WORK, I believe it's your best till now. It is intense. (one of my poems has about the same idea ...
Nov 22, 2008 -
Re: Can’t Take the Pain (Punk Rock)
Nice, nice. So this is metal.... right? Sooooo. Where to start? Wait I know!!!! PUNCTUATION!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! >Remember the: . and ! and ? and , :s > I want to cry ...
Nov 22, 2008
